After reading the revisions that were suggested on my rough draft, I have realized that I have a lot more work to do on my paper before I hand it in on Tuesday. The first thing I am going to try to improve on is my introduction. According to the comments that were left on my paper, my introduction didn't flow well and was difficult to follow. I think that I may break up my introduction into two separate paragraphs and clarify some of my thoughts for my audience. In general, I believe that I need to review the way I phrased many of the sentences that I wrote in my rough draft. Along with the introduction, I need to write a clear and concise conclusion. It is important that I wrap up all of my thoughts into a paragraph that is very telling of the argument I am trying to get across in my paper. I believe that a much stronger conclusion and a much stronger introduction will lead to a much stronger paper. I also want to expand on some of my thoughts, specifically when I touched on the way the director filmed the scene almost always just on her face, at the end of my draft. I think this is an interesting topic that can be expanded tremendously and I plan to do so when I revise this rough draft. I think that if I expand on my thoughts throughout the entire draft that I will have a stronger argument, which will lead to a stronger final draft.